Revision Plan

3 Steps For Revision:

1. "Unpacking"-Put more detail into my story.
2. Make sure I answer the "So what?" at the end of my story.
3. Make sure reader doesn't have to make connections; that's my job.

3 Steps For Editing:

1. Watch for "Things, this, its..."
2. Watch out for too many commas.
3. Make sure each sentence in a paragraph has the same focus as the paragraph all together.